芝浦工業大学Writing 1B 1/11 – expressing an opinion & writing a proposal final essay (Part 2)

Hello to all my Writing 1B students,

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Happy New Year! How are you after the holidays? I hope you could have a good time and relax.  

Let's look at how to write a proposal (企画書)! This is important - the end of our class is very close - so look at this blogpost as many times as you want or need.

STEPS
1. We have looked at how to write an outline, with supposting reasons. Now how can we make a proposal to act on our opinions? Here's our example of a topic sentence, with supporting reasons (and signal words), from our class on 12/21:

Vending machines at Shibaura should serve fruit and other healthy snacks. I will give some reasons for this opinion.

To begin with, fruit and healthy snacks give students and teachers more energy because they are made of natural sugars that the body can take in more easily. In addition, they make people less tired and this helps them to keep going longer through the day. They are also often low in fat and calories, because doctors often recommend fruit, for example, to people who are trying to lose weight. Finally, they are often cheaper than chocolate and soda and easier to throw away in the garbage because they are often not in wrappers or containers.

How can we propose an action to do something about this? Let's go to the next step!

2. Write some ideas about some actions the university can take. For example:

Shibaura can search out contractors that supply fruit and healthy snacks.

Shibaura can search out contractors that supply fruit and healthy snacks.

The university can put posters around the campus about healthy eating habits.

The university can put posters in the buildings and around the campus promoting healthy eating habits.

A club could be started that promotes healthy snacks. It could have a display during the school festival with fruit-based snacks and healthy desserts.

haihabits and has a stand or display during the festival with fruit-based snacks and
The school could let students who buy healthy snacks from vending machines show proof that they bought these snacks. It could give them discounts in the campus co-op.

3. Now use signal words, plus add a few more supporting reasons, and put these action ideas into paragraph form. These two paragraphs - the topic sentence paragraph with supporting reasons plus the actions paragraph showing what you think Shibaura should do - put together, will make your proposal essay. 

If you want to refresh yourselves again on how to write an outline, click on the link here to the blogpost about outlines and supporting reasons from December 21st!

I will not tell you what to do from here. It is now up to you to build up your ideas! Once again - look at this blogpost as many times as you want or need!

See you next week in our last class! Work hard on your final essays - and good luck!