Hello!
How are you? Today I'd like to publish some examples of your writing, and I'd like you to read these and post comments about them. What do you think of them?
Here's the first one:
Here's the first one:
I love the picture of Times Square in
New York, because I heard from many of my friends who went there that there is
a nice and amazing place. They show me some pictures of that place.
I think that is a bright place and it
have many peoples who go visit it. Since am young I loved visit a nice place
like Times Square. I want to take many pictures from there and post it on my Facebook
page.
Last year I heard from my friend who
went there that the place is going to be more and more nice than before.my
dreams is to go there one day, once going there I want to visit many shopping
malls, many build and make many friends from there. That’s why I am trying my best
to save money to realize the dream.
That's great! Let's see another one:
In Japan, we enjoy
street festival in summer. The festivals are local and the scales are not big.
But there are so many shops that sell something eat like kakigori, shaved
ice, and serve the places to play some funny games like kingyosukui, scooping
gold fish. We often go to the festivals with our friends during the summer
vacation.
When I was an
elementary school student, a street festival was held nearby my school. I
participated in the festival as a member of the brass band gathered by the
music teacher in my school. We wore the same costumes and marched down the
central street of many shops. We were so nervous at first because each of us
had had no chance of being paid attention to. But, as we started, we enjoyed
and felt the time we played too short.
Playing the
instruments, we were caught in rain unfortunately. But the people who enjoyed
the festival did not move. They listened to we play to the very end. We were
loved by citizens in our city. As soon as we finished playing, we ran to the
tent where our baggage was. As we wiped the instruments, our teacher said, “Our
performance is a great success!” A sense of achievement delighted us so much. The
experience is so nice that I will never forget it though I do not play the
trombone now and I have not seen the members for the long time.
I think that we felt
happy when we realize that someone pays attention to us. That is why I think
performances are necessary to get confidences. Street festivals are also nice
to give the chances to express ourselves. And these are essential places to
enjoy familiar games and foods and to communicate with our neighbors.
That's a great one too! Now read this one:
I have been to The Great Wall. My
impression was grand. It is a symbol of China. It starts at the Jiayuguan
through Gansu province in the west and ends at the Shanhaiguan in Hebei
province in the east. We call it “The Ten-thousand Li Great Wall” in Chinese.
The Great Wall has a history of more
than two thousand years and it is too long to get to the top of it. Lots of beautiful legends and stories about The Great Wall
took place following along the construction in the past. These stories indicate
that it is the production of Chinese commoners.
Nowadays, every year people from all
over the world to visit it. When I think of The Great Wall, I feel proud of my
country from the bottom of my heart.
Now that is a great piece about the Great Wall! Now here's another one about it:
I lived in Shanghai, China for more
than eight years until summer of last year. I have already been to Hangzhou,
Anhui, and so on. But I have never been to Beijing before. It means I have
never been to the Great Wall. Although Shanghai and Beijing are in the same
country, those two places have a long distance. The Great Wall is the symbol of
China, which is why it is famous in the world. It has a great history of China
so that I must visit there and feel the history of China at least one time in
my whole life. I think a long time ago people were very strong and I admire
them because they made such a wall by handmade by using a lot of time and
people. Also, a lot of people were died when built this wall so this wall is
made up by so many lives.
We must protect this wall and do not to waste their
lives. I am busy now because of university and part time job. So I am going to
earn a lot of money and I want to go the Great Wall with my friends in the
future.
Fantastic! Let's look at this one:
I want to go to a tropical island. I want to relax, because I am very busy now. So I want to see the beautiful sea and landscapes.
I think that I am impressed by the innocence of the beach! I was impressed to
see the scenery! I want to go here! I want to swim in the beautiful sea. I
think that a heart is settled down to the fragrance of the beach and a sound to
wave. I want to enjoy while relax. It is good to be alone, but thinks that it
is good I go with a friend, and to play. I want to do beach volleyball and
fishing! I do the beautiful sea front and want to live a self-sufficient life.
I want to look at the beautiful sea while sitting down all day on the beach. I
want to live relaxed life! The light blue that the color of the sea is
transparent and the white that the beach is beautiful. In the island, plants grow
thick in an uninhabited island. Fruit grows, and animals live. I never go here,
because the once is enough, the sea wants to go to the beautiful place! I
want to see the scene which solar light reflects in the sea. I love beautiful
landscapes! I want to certainly go when I become an adult.
That sounds like an incredible place to be!
This is what I hope will be Part 1 of our collection of your great writing. I'd like to gather up more to make a Part 2. So keep sending me your writing!
See you next time!
This is what I hope will be Part 1 of our collection of your great writing. I'd like to gather up more to make a Part 2. So keep sending me your writing!
See you next time!
Photo credits: Top photo: "Colorful Puppets On A Market Stall In Kathmandu, Nepal" (courtesy of think4photop)/Times Square: "New York Times" (courtesy of Antoine Henrich)/Japanese street festival: "Street Festival, Hakone" (personal image)/ Great Wall: "Great Wall Of China" (courtesy of cescassawin)/Tropical island: "Cloud Reflection At Dusk" (courtesy of samuiblue)/All attributed pictures from FreeDigitalPhotos.net
